(Body Paragraph #1) The narrator is ashamed of his crippled brother. For example when the narrator first meets doodle his brother he got very upset that he got crippled and not normal. This shows how the narrator truly feels about his brother and how he views him as an individual. This also shows that the narrator has a tough time accepting people for the way they are. In addition before doodle falls he says, “Brother Brother, don't leave me! Don't leave me.” This shows that doodle really does love his brother and cares about all that he has done for him growing up. This also shows that the narrator treats doodle like trash at certain times. The narrator cannot accept the fact that doodle will always be crippled.
As you can see above this is one of my two body paragraphs. This is for me my strongest piece from this essay because I not only edited it over and over but I also worked hard o the body paragraphs. I received a grade of 2+ on this which is an average grade for some but for me it shows that I have improved a lot considering the first grade I got the essay was a 1. My goals for future writing is simply working on the conclusion because that is for me the weakest part in an essay that I wrote.